Tora
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A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 11:38:18 GMT -5
Tora wandered looking for the roots she most needed to get. She stood quietly on tiger pads, her hands at her sides as she stood on a small stump, sniffing for any sign that some roots or the plant that had the roots were near. Tora's tail flicked as she caught a scent. She lepted off of the stump and began to walk agian, her tiger ears alert and turning every now and than listening for something to come forth. Her twin, lightning and fire swords were at her sides as arrows were hidden by her long hair. At least they never got caught in her hair otherwise, she would have a bit of trouble there now wouldn't she? Tora, other than getting the roots, was itching to see if a demon or creature was around to fight with. Well, alot of the time it could seem she was always ready for a fight, but not always.
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 11:42:30 GMT -5
She turned to look behind her, to hear something of a snarl. Tora's copper eyes hardened as she smirked only to see a Nix-hound. In a flash as the Nix-hound lepted at her she fell back to her hands and sent her tiger haunches at the Nix-hound. The hidden claws of her tiger pads shown and dug deeply into the hound's chest. It shricked with pain as Tora Flipped the creature to its back and was in the air than she herself landed on its chest. It snarled and clawed at her tiger pads, but Tora severed its head with one of her blitzing swords.
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 11:47:21 GMT -5
She smirked as she retracted her claws which were now bloody. "Puh...to easy..." She muttered under her breath walking away. Tora's ears perked as she caught something else. Finally a Dromba Root! She Saw the Dromba plant and began to dig at its side than taking the root and putting it in a small bag she carried with herself. "Just 4 more" She said to herself. She scoured around a small patch of plants that was around the one Dromba she had found. Tora only found one more and so had to retrive 3 more. Tora scoured again, sniffing the plants, but found no more in the little area. Her tail wavered behind her as she began to walk agian in silence, not really noticing the blood from her tiger pads. She ignored it cause it wasn't bleeding very much and not to worry about.
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 13:01:50 GMT -5
Something began to creep near her, she paused and looked to the side. One of those Rabid hounds had fallowed her blood scent. It zigzaged and than lepted at her. it yelped though as it was hit with the side of Tora's sword, which blitzed crimson lightning in joy to kill today. Tora put her sword away and turned into a large tiger with a black coat tainted with red stripes. Soon she and the Hound were in a twist of clashing fangs, but finally Tora struck the life vain of the creature. it coughed up blood choaking on what ran through its own vains. Its own blood had betrayed it. Tora watched as the thing died. Tora wasn't meant as a killer, once she would trust you as a firend. Than you would have a good, and strong firend, a loyal one. Once gaining her trust she wasn't known to turn on you and would expect the same.
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 13:09:47 GMT -5
She shethed the blade looked to its bloody side. Using a bit of her sleeve she cleaned it, not wanting the steel to stain. The lightning of the blade blitzed to the ground signaling that a root was near. She put the root away again and dug at the root, retriving it quickly. Like last time she scoured the place around this root, but found nothing more.
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Post by Rangavar on Feb 22, 2005 16:33:14 GMT -5
//-- Confirmed:: Rewarded 200g + scroll
Its was pretty good. The fighting is a little dull and skippy though.
Use more blitzy verbs than the ones your using like for instance:
"Its snarled as it clawed her in the tiger pads."
Use more descriptive and sinsister approach when describing an enemies actions like so:
"The Hound snarled glaring its fangs and rattling his tentacles together. It attacked and with a vile thrust of its mangled claws it tore into Tora's 'tiger pads' (paw is fine)"
See isn't that better?
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 16:59:23 GMT -5
Yeah, but how was I to know what the hound looked like well with tentacles that is, don't see anything like that
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Post by Rangavar on Feb 22, 2005 17:01:53 GMT -5
Umm, In the Rules and help board there is a description of many of the animals. Lol... Its called the Monster List.... BTW!! Thank you for reminding me! I need to update that!
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Tora
Junior
A wandering soul, with a meaning that no one may know. Let her live in a way all her own
Posts: 55
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Post by Tora on Feb 22, 2005 17:03:10 GMT -5
uh...your welcome?
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